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the quiet fog rise gave you

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the roaring waterfall took you
as I ran along the wild river's edge
screaming your name and waving my arms
as you sat calmly, facing forward

the roaring waterfall took you
and I watched your back hit that rock
the crack in my mind shifted my views

the roaring waterfall took you
and now your ears and eyes are pooled blood

the roaring waterfall took you
something about memories of not knowing when to give up
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pansydiv's avatar
The repetition in this is such a good poetic device. I  also love how the verses get shorter each time, because even though the tone is pretty frantic, the situation is dire and the speaker is probably giving up